Ventriloquist Zed
Posts : 994 Reputation : 18 Join date : 2012-12-02 Location : USA
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| Subject: Masks - A Poem Wed Feb 05, 2014 11:16 am | |
| I never really did like my smile. I can tell you that much for sure. It always seemed forced, like mine just wasn't as real as the rest of the worlds. I've always likewise been envious of people with big beautiful smiles like you see on television. I suppose now I know why. I simply was never meant to wear one. It is fake. Oh well.
Placed upon as some disagreeable task It begs a question that one must ask. We've all seen them, so question someone you know- Inquire them promptly, "What's behind your mask?"
Please don't touch and don't dare to know. It's fragile as porcelain, and white as snow, In a time forgotten I donned my own- This mask became me, ages ago.
This smile if fake, though a piece of fine art. Let this mouth fool you, and it'll tear you apart. So don't get to close now I knew from the start- Honest to God, I will break your heart.
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Amaterasu Moderator
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| Subject: Re: Masks - A Poem Wed Feb 05, 2014 11:27 am | |
| That's deep. I always read your poems but commenting this time. Its really sad and well written at the same time. Hope you are okay if its written to show your true feelings. |
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Nottu Lucian
Posts : 3368 Reputation : 118 Join date : 2013-02-03
Character Sheet Name: Herenyonen HP: (84/84) Age: 29
| Subject: Re: Masks - A Poem Wed Feb 05, 2014 7:37 pm | |
| That's freaking awesome. Deep thought that. Loved Vent. |
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ludalfa Guest
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| Subject: Re: Masks - A Poem Wed Feb 05, 2014 8:15 pm | |
| man another poem its nice. |
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Ventriloquist Zed
Posts : 994 Reputation : 18 Join date : 2012-12-02 Location : USA
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| Subject: Re: Masks - A Poem Wed Feb 05, 2014 8:25 pm | |
| Hmm anyone got any particular comment on the following question?
"honest to God I will break your heart" OR! "Honest to God I would break you heart."
Which sounds better for the poem itself? |
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Superion Maximus Leona
Posts : 3080 Reputation : 3 Join date : 2013-09-21 Age : 28 Location : Cybertron
Character Sheet Name: Superion HP: (1000/1000) Age: 2 million
| Subject: Re: Masks - A Poem Wed Feb 05, 2014 10:54 pm | |
| i think will sounds better. Will implies that it shall happen and would implies it has happened. So i definatly think will |
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